<div dir="ltr"><div><div><div>thanks Iain looks good<br><br>some typos:<br>Wwork -> Work<br></div>FotoToon -> OK is singular not plural<br>speech and though -> speech and thought<br><span class="im">Paint provides to tools -> </span><span class="im">Paint provides tools<br>Make Sugar activities -> Make Sugar Activities / edit existing activities -> edit existing Activities / Browse activity -> Browse Activity (((Activities always init-capitalized in Sugar context when describing applications)))<br><br></span></div><div><span class="im">Also Pippy & Develop should be in a "Getting Technical" section not regrouped under "Learning by doing" please<br><br></span></div><div><span class="im">Tweaks:<br></span>* Get Books. Download electronic books from all over the web. Explore with ease the<span class="im"><div> classics and modern books from the Internet Archive, Feedbooks, etc.</div></span></div><div><span class="im"><br></span></div><div><span class="im">Music - I think this refers to the Jukebox Activity, should be:<br></span></div><div><span class="im">* Jukebox. </span>Media player to play different kinds of audio and video files.<br></div><div>However, I am not sure if this Activity is in the latest SoaS or not?<br></div><div><span class="im"><br>* Record is the basic rich-media capture Activity. It lets you capture still images, video, and/or audio. (((remove "for the laptop" - we can't assume SoaS will be running on a laptop)))<br><br></span></div><div><span class="im">Finally, an HTML issue:</span> the left/right curly quote marks (cf. "office desktop") which probably came in from copy/pasted text should either be replacd with simple double parentheses (" ") or the HTML entities “ and ”</div><div><span class="im"><br></span></div><div><span class="im">thanks<br></span></div><span class="im"></span>Sean<br></div><span class="im"><br></span></div><div class="gmail_extra"><br><div class="gmail_quote">On Sun, May 17, 2015 at 6:12 PM, Iain Brown Douglas <span dir="ltr"><<a href="mailto:iain@browndouglas.plus.com" target="_blank">iain@browndouglas.plus.com</a>></span> wrote:<br><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0 0 0 .8ex;border-left:1px #ccc solid;padding-left:1ex"><span class="">On Sun, 2015-05-17 at 15:14 +0200, Sean DALY wrote:<br>
> Peter - Walter's edits were for the Activities descriptions, mine were<br>
> for the introduction, no reconciliation necessary<br>
><br>
><br>
> Sean<br>
><br>
><br>
><br>
> On Sat, May 16, 2015 at 12:38 PM, Peter Robinson<br>
> <<a href="mailto:pbrobinson@gmail.com">pbrobinson@gmail.com</a>> wrote:<br>
> Walter sent some edits, I believe most of those have gone in,<br>
> we need<br>
> to update titles still I believe.<br>
><br>
> This is what we currently have, the Activities list and layout<br>
> are now set.<br>
><br>
> <a href="http://spins.stg.fedoraproject.org/en/soas/" target="_blank">http://spins.stg.fedoraproject.org/en/soas/</a><br>
><br>
> We can tweak the text but I need to have the edits<br>
> co-ordinated,<br>
<br>
</span>Hi all,<br>
<br>
The attached text file starts from<br>
<a href="http://spins.stg.fedoraproject.org/en/soas/" target="_blank">http://spins.stg.fedoraproject.org/en/soas/</a>, taken during Sunday,<br>
with contributions from Sean & Walter/Sam added.<br>
<br>
There is still some work to do, additions, subtractions or comments<br>
please!<br>
<br>
Regards,<br>
<br>
Iain<br>
<div class="HOEnZb"><div class="h5"><br>
> I<br>
> don't have time to to do that so please liaise with Walter to<br>
> come up<br>
> with the final edits so I can submit them early next week as a<br>
> single<br>
> final edit.<br>
><br>
> Peter<br>
><br>
><br>
><br>
> On Sat, May 16, 2015 at 11:25 AM, Sean DALY<br>
> <<a href="mailto:sdaly.be@gmail.com">sdaly.be@gmail.com</a>> wrote:<br>
> > Peter - are the intro edits I sent going in?<br>
> > thanks<br>
> > Sean<br>
> ><br>
> ><br>
> > On Fri, May 15, 2015 at 3:00 PM, Peter Robinson<br>
> <<a href="mailto:pbrobinson@gmail.com">pbrobinson@gmail.com</a>><br>
> > wrote:<br>
> >><br>
> >> It's already in process<br>
> >><br>
> >> On Fri, May 15, 2015 at 1:02 PM, Sam P.<br>
> <<a href="mailto:sam.parkinson3@gmail.com">sam.parkinson3@gmail.com</a>> wrote:<br>
> >> > Hi Peter,<br>
> >> ><br>
> >> > I think Walter send out a good copy [1] with headers -<br>
> maybe we could<br>
> >> > use<br>
> >> > those headers?<br>
> >> ><br>
> >> > Thanks,<br>
> >> > Sam<br>
> >> ><br>
> >> > [1]<br>
> <a href="http://lists.sugarlabs.org/archive/sugar-devel/2015-May/050190.html" target="_blank">http://lists.sugarlabs.org/archive/sugar-devel/2015-May/050190.html</a><br>
> >> ><br>
> >> > On Thu, May 14, 2015 at 7:09 PM Peter Robinson<br>
> <<a href="mailto:pbrobinson@gmail.com">pbrobinson@gmail.com</a>><br>
> >> > wrote:<br>
> >> >><br>
> >> >> On Thu, May 14, 2015 at 6:15 AM, Sam Parkinson<br>
> >> >> <<a href="mailto:sam.parkinson3@gmail.com">sam.parkinson3@gmail.com</a>><br>
> >> >> wrote:<br>
> >> >> > Hi Peter,<br>
> >> >> ><br>
> >> >> > Peter Robinson wrote:<br>
> >> >> >> Hi Sam, Gonzalo et el,<br>
> >> >> >><br>
> >> >> >> I've worked with the Fedora web team to update it<br>
> some based<br>
> >> >> >> partially<br>
> >> >> >> on Sam's details below.<br>
> >> >> >><br>
> >> >> >> Details are here:<br>
> >> >> >> <a href="http://spins.stg.fedoraproject.org/en/soas/" target="_blank">http://spins.stg.fedoraproject.org/en/soas/</a><br>
> >> >> >><br>
> >> >> >> Let me know of any feedback, I personally think it<br>
> looks really fab!<br>
> >> >> ><br>
> >> >> > Yeah, it does.<br>
> >> >> ><br>
> >> >> > Is there a way to have different headers? Some of the<br>
> headings (esp.<br>
> >> >> > Education) are not aappropriate for Sugar.<br>
> >> >><br>
> >> >> Yes, provide me details in concise details and we'll<br>
> review them and<br>
> >> >> get them integrated. I knew it wasn't perfect but we<br>
> needed to get the<br>
> >> >> majority of the bits in place.<br>
> >> >><br>
> >> >> Peter<br>
> >> _______________________________________________<br>
> >> IAEP -- It's An Education Project (not a laptop project!)<br>
> >> <a href="mailto:IAEP@lists.sugarlabs.org">IAEP@lists.sugarlabs.org</a><br>
> >> <a href="http://lists.sugarlabs.org/listinfo/iaep" target="_blank">http://lists.sugarlabs.org/listinfo/iaep</a><br>
> ><br>
> ><br>
><br>
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