<div dir="ltr"><div><div><div>thanks Iain looks good<br><br>some typos:<br>Wwork -> Work<br></div>FotoToon -> OK is singular not plural<br>speech and though -> speech and thought<br><span class="im">Paint provides to tools -> </span><span class="im">Paint provides tools<br>Make Sugar activities -> Make Sugar Activities / edit existing activities -> edit existing Activities / Browse activity -> Browse Activity (((Activities always init-capitalized in Sugar context when describing applications)))<br><br></span></div><div><span class="im">Also Pippy & Develop should be in a "Getting Technical" section not regrouped under "Learning by doing" please<br><br></span></div><div><span class="im">Tweaks:<br></span>* Get Books. Download electronic books from all over the web. Explore with ease the<span class="im"><div> classics and modern books from the Internet Archive, Feedbooks, etc.</div></span></div><div><span class="im"><br></span></div><div><span class="im">Music - I think this refers to the Jukebox Activity, should be:<br></span></div><div><span class="im">* Jukebox. </span>Media player to play different kinds of audio and video files.<br></div><div>However, I am not sure if this Activity is in the latest SoaS or not?<br></div><div><span class="im"><br>* Record is the basic rich-media capture Activity. It lets you capture still images, video, and/or audio. (((remove "for the laptop" - we can't assume SoaS will be running on a laptop)))<br><br></span></div><div><span class="im">Finally, an HTML issue:</span> the left/right curly quote marks (cf. "office desktop") which probably came in from copy/pasted text should either be replacd with simple double parentheses (" ") or the HTML entities “ and ”</div><div><span class="im"><br></span></div><div><span class="im">thanks<br></span></div><span class="im"></span>Sean<br></div><span class="im"><br></span></div><div class="gmail_extra"><br><div class="gmail_quote">On Sun, May 17, 2015 at 6:12 PM, Iain Brown Douglas <span dir="ltr"><<a href="mailto:iain@browndouglas.plus.com" target="_blank">iain@browndouglas.plus.com</a>></span> wrote:<br><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0 0 0 .8ex;border-left:1px #ccc solid;padding-left:1ex"><span class="">On Sun, 2015-05-17 at 15:14 +0200, Sean DALY wrote:<br> > Peter - Walter's edits were for the Activities descriptions, mine were<br> > for the introduction, no reconciliation necessary<br> ><br> ><br> > Sean<br> ><br> ><br> ><br> > On Sat, May 16, 2015 at 12:38 PM, Peter Robinson<br> > <<a href="mailto:pbrobinson@gmail.com">pbrobinson@gmail.com</a>> wrote:<br> > Walter sent some edits, I believe most of those have gone in,<br> > we need<br> > to update titles still I believe.<br> ><br> > This is what we currently have, the Activities list and layout<br> > are now set.<br> ><br> > <a href="http://spins.stg.fedoraproject.org/en/soas/" target="_blank">http://spins.stg.fedoraproject.org/en/soas/</a><br> ><br> > We can tweak the text but I need to have the edits<br> > co-ordinated,<br> <br> </span>Hi all,<br> <br> The attached text file starts from<br> <a href="http://spins.stg.fedoraproject.org/en/soas/" target="_blank">http://spins.stg.fedoraproject.org/en/soas/</a>, taken during Sunday,<br> with contributions from Sean & Walter/Sam added.<br> <br> There is still some work to do, additions, subtractions or comments<br> please!<br> <br> Regards,<br> <br> Iain<br> <div class="HOEnZb"><div class="h5"><br> > I<br> > don't have time to to do that so please liaise with Walter to<br> > come up<br> > with the final edits so I can submit them early next week as a<br> > single<br> > final edit.<br> ><br> > Peter<br> ><br> ><br> ><br> > On Sat, May 16, 2015 at 11:25 AM, Sean DALY<br> > <<a href="mailto:sdaly.be@gmail.com">sdaly.be@gmail.com</a>> wrote:<br> > > Peter - are the intro edits I sent going in?<br> > > thanks<br> > > Sean<br> > ><br> > ><br> > > On Fri, May 15, 2015 at 3:00 PM, Peter Robinson<br> > <<a href="mailto:pbrobinson@gmail.com">pbrobinson@gmail.com</a>><br> > > wrote:<br> > >><br> > >> It's already in process<br> > >><br> > >> On Fri, May 15, 2015 at 1:02 PM, Sam P.<br> > <<a href="mailto:sam.parkinson3@gmail.com">sam.parkinson3@gmail.com</a>> wrote:<br> > >> > Hi Peter,<br> > >> ><br> > >> > I think Walter send out a good copy [1] with headers -<br> > maybe we could<br> > >> > use<br> > >> > those headers?<br> > >> ><br> > >> > Thanks,<br> > >> > Sam<br> > >> ><br> > >> > [1]<br> > <a href="http://lists.sugarlabs.org/archive/sugar-devel/2015-May/050190.html" target="_blank">http://lists.sugarlabs.org/archive/sugar-devel/2015-May/050190.html</a><br> > >> ><br> > >> > On Thu, May 14, 2015 at 7:09 PM Peter Robinson<br> > <<a href="mailto:pbrobinson@gmail.com">pbrobinson@gmail.com</a>><br> > >> > wrote:<br> > >> >><br> > >> >> On Thu, May 14, 2015 at 6:15 AM, Sam Parkinson<br> > >> >> <<a href="mailto:sam.parkinson3@gmail.com">sam.parkinson3@gmail.com</a>><br> > >> >> wrote:<br> > >> >> > Hi Peter,<br> > >> >> ><br> > >> >> > Peter Robinson wrote:<br> > >> >> >> Hi Sam, Gonzalo et el,<br> > >> >> >><br> > >> >> >> I've worked with the Fedora web team to update it<br> > some based<br> > >> >> >> partially<br> > >> >> >> on Sam's details below.<br> > >> >> >><br> > >> >> >> Details are here:<br> > >> >> >> <a href="http://spins.stg.fedoraproject.org/en/soas/" target="_blank">http://spins.stg.fedoraproject.org/en/soas/</a><br> > >> >> >><br> > >> >> >> Let me know of any feedback, I personally think it<br> > looks really fab!<br> > >> >> ><br> > >> >> > Yeah, it does.<br> > >> >> ><br> > >> >> > Is there a way to have different headers? Some of the<br> > headings (esp.<br> > >> >> > Education) are not aappropriate for Sugar.<br> > >> >><br> > >> >> Yes, provide me details in concise details and we'll<br> > review them and<br> > >> >> get them integrated. I knew it wasn't perfect but we<br> > needed to get the<br> > >> >> majority of the bits in place.<br> > >> >><br> > >> >> Peter<br> > >> _______________________________________________<br> > >> IAEP -- It's An Education Project (not a laptop project!)<br> > >> <a href="mailto:IAEP@lists.sugarlabs.org">IAEP@lists.sugarlabs.org</a><br> > >> <a href="http://lists.sugarlabs.org/listinfo/iaep" target="_blank">http://lists.sugarlabs.org/listinfo/iaep</a><br> > ><br> > ><br> ><br> ><br> ><br> </div></div><div class="HOEnZb"><div class="h5">> _______________________________________________<br> > Sugar-devel mailing list<br> > <a href="mailto:Sugar-devel@lists.sugarlabs.org">Sugar-devel@lists.sugarlabs.org</a><br> > <a href="http://lists.sugarlabs.org/listinfo/sugar-devel" target="_blank">http://lists.sugarlabs.org/listinfo/sugar-devel</a><br> <br> </div></div></blockquote></div><br></div>