[Marketing] [Sugar-devel] f22-spins page is being written and needs suggestions

[Peter Robinson]

On Wed, May 13, 2015 at 4:49 PM, Sean DALY <sdaly.be at gmail.com> wrote:
> ah that's great Peter we just need these small changes then:
>
> * add this phrase to the start of the "Sugar automatically saves" paragraph:
> Sugar sets aside the traditional “office-desktop” metaphor, presenting a
> child-friendly simple graphical environment.

Added, I've dropped the simple so it's just " child-friendly graphical
environment"

> * replace "Sugar automatically saves your progress" with "Sugar
> automatically saves the child's progress"

NAK, it your is fine, it could be a child reading it as well.

> * add at the end of that graf "Applications in Sugar are known as
> Activities, some of which are described below."
>
> * Inverse the second and third grafs - describe Sugar first, then the
> specific advantages of the Soas spin.

Done.

Should be there in a couple of hours

> many thanks
> Sean
>
> On Wed, May 13, 2015 at 5:33 PM, Peter Robinson <pbrobinson at gmail.com>
> wrote:
>>
>> See the post I just sent to the list less than a hour ago :-)
>>
>> Thanks Sean,
>>
>> Peter
>>
>> On Wed, May 13, 2015 at 4:24 PM, Sean DALY <sdaly.be at gmail.com> wrote:
>> > Hi Tom, Gonzalo had mentioned this, I have a rewrite of the introduction
>> > in
>> > the works and Sam's Activity texts are good. The main issue is
>> > explaining
>> > that SOAS Desktop is not a desktop (!)
>> >
>> > Peter is coordinating on the Fedora side.
>> > Sean
>> >
>> >
>> > On Wed, May 13, 2015 at 3:37 PM, Thomas Gilliard <satellitgo at gmail.com>
>> > wrote:
>> >>
>> >> Please Help
>> >> f22 get fedora spins page is being written and needs suggestions
>> >>
>> >> robyduck on #fedora-qa  needs sugar writeup of spins page on fedora for
>> >> f22:
>> >> he has thi text:
>> >> http://lists.sugarlabs.org/archive/iaep/2015-May/017396.html
>> >>
>> >> I sent him 2 screenshots yesterday
>> >> http://wiki.sugarlabs.org/go/File:Sugar-Home_.png
>> >> http://wiki.sugarlabs.org/go/File:Screenshot_of_Mesh_1.png
>> >>
>> >> http://spins.stg.fedoraproject.org/   is the proposed format
>> >> he needs it done by saturday ....
>> >>
>> >> satellit
>> >>
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