[Marketing] [Sugar-devel] f22-spins page is being written and needs suggestions

[Sean DALY]

ah that's great Peter we just need these small changes then:

* add this phrase to the start of the "Sugar automatically saves" paragraph:
Sugar sets aside the traditional “office-desktop” metaphor, presenting a
child-friendly simple graphical environment.

* replace "Sugar automatically saves your progress" with "Sugar
automatically saves the child's progress"

* add at the end of that graf "Applications in Sugar are known as
Activities, some of which are described below."

* Inverse the second and third grafs - describe Sugar first, then the
specific advantages of the Soas spin.

many thanks
Sean

On Wed, May 13, 2015 at 5:33 PM, Peter Robinson <pbrobinson at gmail.com>
wrote:

> See the post I just sent to the list less than a hour ago :-)
>
> Thanks Sean,
>
> Peter
>
> On Wed, May 13, 2015 at 4:24 PM, Sean DALY <sdaly.be at gmail.com> wrote:
> > Hi Tom, Gonzalo had mentioned this, I have a rewrite of the introduction
> in
> > the works and Sam's Activity texts are good. The main issue is explaining
> > that SOAS Desktop is not a desktop (!)
> >
> > Peter is coordinating on the Fedora side.
> > Sean
> >
> >
> > On Wed, May 13, 2015 at 3:37 PM, Thomas Gilliard <satellitgo at gmail.com>
> > wrote:
> >>
> >> Please Help
> >> f22 get fedora spins page is being written and needs suggestions
> >>
> >> robyduck on #fedora-qa  needs sugar writeup of spins page on fedora for
> >> f22:
> >> he has thi text:
> >> http://lists.sugarlabs.org/archive/iaep/2015-May/017396.html
> >>
> >> I sent him 2 screenshots yesterday
> >> http://wiki.sugarlabs.org/go/File:Sugar-Home_.png
> >> http://wiki.sugarlabs.org/go/File:Screenshot_of_Mesh_1.png
> >>
> >> http://spins.stg.fedoraproject.org/   is the proposed format
> >> he needs it done by saturday ....
> >>
> >> satellit
> >>
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