Static site feedback: About page copy rewrite draft

[Tomeu Vizoso]

On Mon, Mar 2, 2009 at 22:35, Walter Bender <walter.bender at gmail.com> wrote:
> Looking good. I think we are very close to Release.
>
> nitpics:
>
> * I think sticking to "almost one-million children worldwide in over
> 40 countries" is tighter than "more than 750,000 children worldwide in
> over 40 countries, with 900,000 projected by the end of 2009" and
> within reason in terms of expressing an estimation.

And maybe 1.5 millions by June?

http://www.cnn.com/2009/TECH/03/05/one.laptop.per.child/index.html

Though it's not sure Sugar (or Linux) will be in all of them?

Regards,

Tomeu

> * I liked your earlier suggestion about mentioning i18n. Maybe
> Sayamindu can give an accurate estimate there, but the Sugar Fructose
> is over 67% complete in 26 languages.
>
> * is "Intel Macs" the correct phrase?
>
> * s^which^that (at least in my Style Book)
>
> * should we mention that the collaboration does not require Internet access?
>
> -walter
>
> On Mon, Mar 2, 2009 at 4:19 PM, Sean DALY <sdaly.be at gmail.com> wrote:
>> briefly:
>>
>> * 750,000 <> one-million (homepage number) so I fudged by stating a
>> projection. But this inconsistency needs to be squared away.
>>
>> * added an age range... ballpark?
>>
>> * harped on Activities
>>
>> * boosted collaborative aspect
>>
>> * mentioned compatibility with old/slow PCs... the bane of every teacher
>>
>>
>> thanks
>> Sean
>>
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>> worldwide in over 40 countries, with 900,000 projected by the end of
>> 2009. Sugar provides the means to help people lead fulfilling lives
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>> A liveCD which does not touch the existing hard disk installation is
>> available; a liveUSB stick which can run on most PCs  is under active
>> development.
>>
>> Why Sugar?
>> Sugar sets aside the traditional "office-desktop" metaphor and,
>> through its Activities, engages even the youngest learners in the use
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