Static site feedback: About page copy rewrite draft

[Sean DALY]

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Good comments thanks Caroline

On Tue, Mar 3, 2009 at 4:49 PM, Caroline Meeks
<caroline at solutiongrove.com> wrote:
> looks great! Added comments inline
>
> On Mon, Mar 2, 2009 at 4:19 PM, Sean DALY <sdaly.be at gmail.com> wrote:
>>
>> briefly:
>>
>> * 750,000 <> one-million (homepage number) so I fudged by stating a
>> projection. But this inconsistency needs to be squared away.
>>
>> * added an age range... ballpark?
>
> Lets at least go down to 5 years old.  These poor 3 year olds in Boston
> schools are using windows, they would do much better in Sugar.  Perfect no,
> but much better.
>>
>>
>> * harped on Activities
>>
>> * boosted collaborative aspect
>>
>> * mentioned compatibility with old/slow PCs... the bane of every teacher
>
> Added energy effiecient for greenies and donated computers, for every parent
> who has been told that no the school can't take your computer.
>>
>>
>>
>> thanks
>> Sean
>>
>> ****************** about ******************
>>
>> What is Sugar?
>>
>> The Sugar Learning Platform is a computer environment composed of
>> Activities designed to help children from 6 to 12 years of age learn
>> together through rich-media expression. Sugar is the core component of
>> a worldwide effort to provide every child with the opportunity for a
>> quality education—it is currently used by more than 750,000 children
>> worldwide in over 40 countries, with 900,000 projected by the end of
>> 2009. Sugar provides the means to help people lead fulfilling lives
>> through access to a quality education that is currently missed by so
>> many. Originally developed for the revolutionary One Laptop per Child
>> XO-1 netbook, Sugar can run on small and slow PCs—often the case in
>
> now, Sugar can run on almost any PC, including small netbooks, older and
> donated machines, and new energy efficient computers with limited processing
> power.
>>
>> the classroom. Sugar is now packaged as part of most major GNU/Linux
>> distributions and is compatible with Intel Macs using virtualization.
>> A liveCD which does not touch the existing hard disk installation is
>> available; a liveUSB stick which can run on most PCs  is under active
>> development.
>>
>> Why Sugar?
>> Sugar sets aside the traditional "office-desktop" metaphor and,
>> through its Activities, engages even the youngest learners in the use
>> of computation as a powerful “thing to think with.” They quickly
>> become proficient in using the computer as a tool to engage in
>> authentic problem-solving. Moreover, most Sugar Activities can be
>> shared by learners between machines—children learn as a group, not as
>> a collection of individual users. Sugar users develop skills that help
>> them in all aspects of life.
>
>
> Do we want the 21st Century Skills buzz word in the above paragraph?
>
>>
>> What is Sugar Labs?
>> Sugar Labs is a non-profit foundation whose mission is to support the
>> Sugar community of users and developers and establish regional,
>> autonomous “Sugar Labs” around the world to tailor Sugar to local
>> languages and curricula. Sugar Labs volunteers are passionate about
>> providing education to children.
>
> Shoud we mention SFC in the above paragraph?
>>
>>
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