Static site feedback: Activities page copy rewrite draft

Walter Bender walter.bender at gmail.com
Mon Mar 2 17:28:59 EST 2009


+1

On Mon, Mar 2, 2009 at 5:23 PM, Sean DALY <sdaly.be at gmail.com> wrote:
> As this is a "fun" page with colorful icons, we could consider the
> excitement of an exclamation mark ;-)
>
> proposed lead:
> *********
> Activities are what make Sugar unique. Many Activities can be shared
> between learners with a single click. Sugar Activities are fun,
> friendly, thought-provoking, and collaborative - kids can't
> get enough of them!
> *********
>
> Note: clicking still keeps me in the same Firefox tab... leaving the
> SL site... no way back except back button :-(
>
> Sort: I really do think we need to put the best foot forward. If I
> were a teacher and the first collaborative Sugar Activity suggested
> was "A tool for analyzing hardware and network information", I'd be
> worried the geeks would carry me off (no offense to geeks, I chase
> down bad packets with ardor myself).
>
> Why don't we start with the Journal, and "reassure" parents & teachers
> by starting out with the basics on the first line (I "demoted" Browse
> since maybe no Internet):
>
> Journal - Read - Write - Help
> Chat - Browse - Distance - eToys
> Calculate - TurtleArt - Maze - Memorize
> Moon - Pippy - Paint - Scratch
> Ruler - Record - Implode - WikiBrowse English
> the 4 TamTams
> Measure - Terminal - Analyze - Debug
>



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Walter Bender
Sugar Labs
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